needs a little more work
I'm all for a new animation with a story, especially since I'm tired of seeing a parody of something or crap out of little kids and any crew, but there's nothing really too clear about the story line. It seems to be intentional, since you're obviously going to make more of these. You need to work on making the animation a little smoother, get rid of the frantic camera work, and let the next episode have a good continuity.